I'm rewriting the "hook" description of my dark fantasy novel, The Blood Witch. Let me know if you like it.
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Allysix, The Blood Witch, has been imprisoned in a secret location deep in the mountains for so long that many believe her to be only a myth from ages past. Lured by her bewitching magic, seventeen-year-old Jak is enticed into freeing Allysix, thereby unleashing her miasmic evil into the world.

Upon being freed, Allysix possesses the body of Jak's sweetheart, Brigette, and slaughters their village. Now Jak must fight the incipient evil and insatiable thirst that has been forced upon him. However, the witch's gift may be his only salvation.

Jak must battle, not only his own demon, but the diabolical dark magic that is awakening across the land, in order to make the choice that will save him and Brigette.

Growing up and going to school I hated reading. I would reuse book reports from year to year just so I wouldn't have to read more. It all changed when my friend, Bob, introduced me to Magician Apprentice, by Raymond E. Feist. This was the beginning of my love for fantasy and spurred my interest in reading. After that I read many, many, fantasy novels. My love is with epic fantasy that transports you to a different world where you can meet new interesting people and experience magic and fantastical situations. After many years of reading fantasy, I thought I would like to contribute back to the world of fantasy that had given me so much. I decided to write an epic fantasy tale in, "The Blood Reign Chronicles".  The first book, "The Blood Witch", is my premier novel. In writing it, and proof reading it, and after many revisions, from a epic fantasy lover's objective perspective, I think I have done the genre justice. Hopefully readers of my novel will feel the same, and be transported to a magical place, away from the mundane of everyday life, to a place they will come to love, and identify with. It is my sincere hope that readers will love the story and the "break" from reality. :)